Sunday, April 19, 2009

Exploration can create conflict and misunderstanding
In the past, a group of people in Canada called Hikings decided to go explore because they wanted to have an unusual life and to develop their country. After they planned for a long time they started their journey for the exploration. They were according to the routes that the map showed to have explore. They felt elated and excited at the beginning because all the objects that around them are different and interesting. Unfortunately everything was unexpected to them that they encountered lots of problems,like they couldn't speak foreign language,they were unwelcoming to the local people and they caused in troubles.

When they arrived at France,they felt interested with anything that around them. Hikings felt very tired after they had a long trip so they wanted to find somewhere to relax in France. When they asked the French for the palce to have relax they felt surprised because they couldn't know what did the French said and the French did not know what did the Hikings said,either. They felt very bemused because they did not know how to communicate with them. Thus Hikings decided to draw pictures to communicate with French and they used pictures to tell French that they wanted have trade with them.

Unlucky,the French felt angry after Hikings told them the reason to come to France. They did not want to others to bother their life and took their resources,so they drew a picture that a man who drove away another man to reveal their decision. Hikings felt indignant after they noticed that French against their demand so they drew a pictures that reveals their angry. Hikings did not give up easily so they drew another picture that reveals their determination and they also showed French the benefit that had trade with them. Unfortunately the French against them again and still wanted them to leave quickly.

The Hikings felt very angry. Thus the leader of Hikings wanted to do someting to exhort French.
A man of Hikings triped a French. Consequently,a conflict happened. Both of them were hotheaded. At that moment French and Hikings were didn't awared that they broke the relationship with each other.This fight abidance in a long time. In the end the Canadian people were failed and they drove away by the French coercive.However Canadian people left over a very bad impression in France. They were left with bile and regret because they lost a really good chance .

Exploration can create conflict and misunderstanding. Exploration also waste people's time that get nothing in the end. Because of exploration France and Hikings broke the relationship in then and lost the friendship at the same time.If without exploration maybe the world will be more peaceful and everyone have a quiet life. It's difficult to get somethings if you aren't have heartfelt. Sometimes if you want to get more you also will lose more in the end.

3 comments:

  1. Thank you for finishing your homework! See you tomorrow!

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  2. The last sentence is a cliche!! :P

    Focus - 3.5/4

    Organization - 3/4 Try to make it more intersting to read. The conclusion should be the neding of your story. It should be engaging to read. I see your thesis statement.

    Content - 3.5/4
    I see you understand the topic and try to talk about the the conflicts and misunderstandings that are created. Try to make it like a story, so it is interesting to read.

    Usage - 3/4
    You have some little mistakes. Don't begin a sentence with a conjunction like "but".

    Style - 3.5/4
    You try to use different words in your essay. You keep a very formal voice. Remember you are writing a story and not just an essay. You might need to think about the feeling of the reader.

    16.5/20 x2 - 33/40

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  3. DO NOT COPY MY ESSAY, HELEN.

    MEMECHEN

    哈.你这作文写的还真是像我的呢.
    哎.就算我帮助你一次好了.
    嘻嘻.开心的晓雨最可爱啦.
    还有三次机会.过时不候.

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